Dear Ms. Jones,

Your essay was very strong and conveyed many wonderful ideas in a logical and coherent matter. Your introduction provided a strong thesis about how society is given a certain ‘ideal body.’ This thesis was then extremely relevant throughout the entire essay. I really enjoyed how you included men as well in this essay because typically females are thought to have been portrayed in a certain way, but men are too. Your introduction to the authors of the sources was strong, which was important in establishing their credibility. Lastly, the conclusion beautifully summed up the entire essay, as opposed to restating the introduction. Your works cited appears to be in an appropriate format, so good job there too!

There are minor changes I would suggest. There are some sentence-level corrections here and there, but besides that, the essay is very well thought-out. Perhaps the paragraphs could be slightly shorter and cut up, but the flow was nice! All in all, that was an excellent paper! Great job!

Have an amazing day,

Ben