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Edited the welcome page to show a friendly face smiling at the reader. Also added an About Me page with a link to my dance team’s latest performance that includes my own piece.

Dear Karli,

In your paper “Society and Body Images,” you explored the role that mass media plays in creating an ideal body type very well. The explanation you gave as to what that means for different sexes and what’s done by people to achieve that was on point and it’s clear that you did your research. I did feel like I learned some more about the subject but the subject itself could use some work. Many people already know that society creates this ideal body type and it’s further propagated as a result of social and mass media. Making the topic more personal or specific can strengthen your paper greatly. I do feel that a lot of the content was repeated as well. While this is good in the sense that you’re not veering away from the main subject of the paper, it can get a little boring to read the words “ideal body type” or “mass media” over and over again. Yes, this is the subject of the paper but it helps to break it up and not use the same phrasing over and over again, if it is difficult at first. In addition, it seems that your paragraphs are very long. Each one is about a page in length and as a result, there’s a lot that’s packed in, making it hard to read. While each paragraph does cover information relevant to its topic, the length makes it easy to lose focus, causing the reader to either go back or push through with confusion. Breaking up the paragraphs a bit more can make the essay overall easier to read. Overall, the paper is very well written and covers a topic that’s becoming increasingly important. It’s clear that you did your research and you know a lot about the topic, but by applying what I said above, I think your paper can be even stronger. As a male, it was interesting to learn that more males develop eating disorders than I initially thought, and it’s one of the things that I will be taking away from this paper.

Regards,

Muhammad

I posted this picture on my Instagram last Friday. My team, PUSO Modern, competed at Elements Dance Competition this past weekend and this was our promotional photo. Our admin board sent this to the group chat, asking us to post this and spread the word about the competition and our performance. In addition to posting it on my Instagram, I also posted it to my Instagram and Snapchat stories. I hoped that all my followers and friends would see it and ultimately buy tickets to come watch and support. When I posted the picture, I captioned it with “One more day! Mad hype to share my first Elements stage with this team 😊
Buy your tickets here: https://www.eventbrite.com/e/fusion-presents-elements-xviii-tickets-43938668741” By including the link, I made it easier for people to go directly to where they would buy tickets. In the picture, I also tagged our team’s Instagram page as well as Boston University’s Fusion’s page, the hosting team. By tagging these pages, it would appear on their own Instagram pages and hopefully more people would see. Since this picture was used primarily to promote the competition and our team’s performance, I wanted it to reach as many people as possible. I could have done more such as using the hashtag #elementsxviii but, for whatever reason, I didn’t. This picture got far less likes than the other ones I’ve posted, receiving 109 likes while my others hover around 300. Since it isn’t a picture of me, it’s to be expected that less people would like it. #like4like

To whom it may concern,

I’m writing to you today to apply for the position of Team Member at Penguin Ice Cream, which I saw posted on a job board at indeed.com. With over a year of service in the food industry, serving rolled ice cream to customers and developing exceptional customer service skills, I am confident in my abilities to perform this role and become a central element to your team.

My prior work experience at 10Below Ice Cream familiarized myself with serving rolled ice cream. I have proven my ability to serve Instagram-worthy and delicious ice cream, evidenced by the pictures that people take of my ice cream after making it. The look of satisfaction and smiles on people’s faces when they take their first bite is a sign of the craftsmanship I put into my work, creating a delicious food for customers to enjoy. While working at 10Below Ice Cream, I was also responsible for managing the cash register, keeping stock, and maintaining a neat working environment. I demonstrated independence after working shifts by myself and being able to keep up with orders and leave the customer with a positive impression and good experience, despite being the only one on shift.

Working at 10Below Ice Cream also allowed me to develop great organizational and multitasking skills. As a worker there, I was in charge of multiple things at once, including taking orders, making the orders, topping the ice cream, and making sure everything is running smoothly. With a plethora of tasks on my plate at once, it was essential that I kept my cool and efficiently worked. Even under stress from long lines and customer demands, it was crucial to me that each customer left feeling satisfied with their ice cream.

Attached is my resume with further information on my skills, prior work experience, and other accomplishments in this field. I look forward to discussing my application with you further.

Sincerely,

Muhammad