I thought this essay was very well done. Right off the bat one can tell that the essay is very organized. The introduction was well written but not excessively long. It contained just the right amount of background information regarding popular media outlets and their connection to how body image is portrayed and how it leads to distorted beauty ideals. The format of the essay followed the thesis exactly. The thesis went as followed: “Social media and mass media create an unrealistic portrayal of the ideal human body for both men and women, which leads to the use of unhealthy means to achieve these standards.” The first main paragraph explored the “ideal” female body type portrayed in media, and how its idealization exploits young women. It also explores the psychology behind wanting to attain these unattainable bodies. The second main paragraph explores similar topics, but focusing on men. It explores the hypermasculinity men are pressured to convey and also shows the feminization of eating disorders among men. The third paragraph then delves deeper into the actual consequences and goes more into depth about the eating disorders. The fourth paragraph then displays how prominent social media is in our lives and how it’s virtually impossible not to see these detrimental images on a daily basis. The author also uses appositive very well. He/she establishes ethos in a very smart manner. For example, the author quotes a woman named Kasey L. Serdar who is a “psychologist who specializes in body image concerns and eating disorders.” This information helps establish a credible source because Sedar’s background pertains to the topic the author is writing about, which is body image. I wouldn’t recommend any changes besides introducing the fourth main paragraph in the thesis, the one about how difficult it is to not be influenced by media. Other than that, it was a very good essay.