In my e-portfolio, I recently updated and edited my rhetorical analysis, argumentative essay and research paper. After reviewing my paper and the grammar mistakes that you marked, I fixed some grammatical mistakes and clarified places where you marked as unclear. Also, I changed my background to a different color. And I revised my “Home” tab to be more interesting and detailed than before.

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Dear Author,

After reading your stem cell research paper, I believe you have done a great job on informing and analyzing the arguments that both sides hold. In your introduction, you started off with a myth that is related to stem cell and it catches my attention and makes me want to keep reading. After a brief introduction of stem cells, instead of using statements to declare your thesis, you asked a question instead. I really like this thesis because it engages a “conversation” with the readers instead of simply stating. Through the entire paper, you are constantly moving back and forth between each side of the controversy. This is a very interesting way of organizing the paper because it generates an image of the battle between two sides. For example, when you first started saying that embryos are essentially humans, which discourages stem cell research. Then starts to refute this idea in the following paragraph by asking whether or not embryos really count as humans. The paper is always build upon the thesis and do not have any irrelevant information. . Aside from the organizations, you implement various sources and explains why these sources are credible by using appositives to introduce the author.  Also, instead of summarized and rephrasing your thesis, you offered a possible solution which answers the “so what” question. 

Overall, your paper is very well focused and organized. I have to say I can’t find any flaws in this paper and it is beyond my ability to improve it.

Best Wishes,

A Reader who admires you.

I went to a concert on Sunday, so I posted a picture of the concert tickets on my Facebook page. My intentional audiences are my friends because I wanted to share my excitement of going to that concert. Even though I got zero comments, I still have two likes under that post, which is nice. I chose Facebook as my social outlet to post this picture because this is the only social outlet that I use. Moreover, I believe Facebook is very casual and it records important dates of my life. This is image is complemented with a text which is: “It’s been a long time since the last one….” By adding this caption, I wanted to imply that this is the second time I went to G.E.M. concert. Initially, I posted the concert tickets to provoke jealousy in my intentional audience, then by using the captions, I can further enhance this feeling to the extreme which make myself somehow superior than others. I believe this really is the general idea behind posting stuff on social media. This image has the necessity of posting in the first place because G.E.M. is a famous Chinese singer. Also, it is just simply worth of posting online because going to concert is an unusual experience unless you are super rich. There are not anyone in particular that I don’t want this image to be viewed because it is just a picture that shows I am going to the concert. I believe this is something that everyone would post and it does not offend anyone.